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11-02-2008, 12:56 AM
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| omega Join Date: Oct 2008
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so ima newb..just started writing like a 2 months ago, and i want to get way better at rap in general and i just need some opinions on where im at.. so heres a little somethin, need some feeback please. stormed out the womb in reckless abandon/ philosophical doom wit a lyrical cannon/ brandin borin bastards while scorin emphatic- ass badgerin, sparatic, euporical tactics/ automatic delivery of vivid shock imagery/ the epitomy of technique, lyrical tyranny/ static electricity affecting the mass/ passin the paved way for the collectin of cash/ paid in tha streets for incredible feats/ wit street credibility for bringin the heat/ beat when i was green but now i've perfected/ the raw ability selected, for killin emcees. it would be much appreciated for some honest feedback.... anything i need to work on? |
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11-14-2008, 09:32 PM
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| I get more pussy than you  Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: Chicago
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cool rhymin, this might be a dope audio, but its kinda corney in text. theres no overall concept or main idea, just a bunch of rhymes. so try pickin a topic and writing about it using wordplay, multis and use a good structure. keep writin.
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11-27-2008, 09:22 AM
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| as always, fuck yourself  Join Date: Nov 2008 Location: Brooklyn, East Ny
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for 2 months in not so bad, good creativity and nice vocabulary flow is pretty smooth as well as steve above me so eloquently put it, just focus a bit more an try to make a rhyme on one subject while still finding a way to think outside the box alot of potential with what your showing right now though
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