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04-08-2010, 12:55 AM
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| Senior Member  Join Date: Mar 2009 Location: Cap City KY
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i got a lil somethin for yall to run with here, 9 lines right there so yall get at it & see who can make the most creative story out of it, use as many lines as you want, this will be a good way to compare and contrast everyone & there different styles and train of thought hope 2 see A LOT of Alternate Endings Bboys currupt as a young buck, from da guns and drugs hung wit thugs. sniffing coke.. said he loved da buzz pop's was rarely there.. mom's, she barely cared had his fair share of trouble and struggled wit wear and tear everywhere he glared he saw the down side of things pounds, powder, painkillers, people poppin spider veins grippin' a dirty syringe, i heard he murdered his friend da case was neva solved. but da streets verdict is him he travels in da shadows, swift as birds in da wind .......
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04-08-2010, 06:24 AM
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| burtblaze.bandcamp.com  Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Detroit, MI
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he travels in da shadows, swift as birds in da wind a rollin stone, keep goin no matter what direction he in Spend the night in a town for a quick fix and hes out prisoner to the thought that he should never be found And captive to the highway, livin outta rest stops Arms get a little shaky everytime he pass cops Or a car that look like one of his boys ridin He pull of in the desert until he certain they aint find him ...
__________________ Burt Blaze: Upgraded (July 2010) - Leading The Blind (June 2009) Glad To Be Back: In Harm's Way (February 2012) - In The Studio (July 2011) - In The Mix EP (February 2011) - In Your House (September 2010) "I seen this mothafucka's 9 smokin... I seen the same nigga with the 9 die with his eyes open" -Scarface |
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06-01-2010, 04:50 AM
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Alternate ending is describe the ending of a story that was planned but unused in favor of the actual ending.In different alternate endings can grow to the world exploding and breaking apart into several pieces.The alternate endings are a special type of deleted scene.
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06-29-2010, 05:23 AM
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| burtblaze.bandcamp.com Join Date: Dec 2009 Location: Detroit, MI
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Oh Chrissy you're such a waste of fuckin life dude I bet you're not the last guy that had your wife screwed I bet when I was up in your house grabbin her dress and snatchin it off You were in the closet watchin grabbing your dick and jackin it off So think of that next time you kiss her...think of me up in her I got her warm n wet as pools openin in the summer You bring her box to nuclear winter, freepostin like a beginner I'm comin back for more tonight, what are we havin for dinner lmao
__________________ Burt Blaze: Upgraded (July 2010) - Leading The Blind (June 2009) Glad To Be Back: In Harm's Way (February 2012) - In The Studio (July 2011) - In The Mix EP (February 2011) - In Your House (September 2010) "I seen this mothafucka's 9 smokin... I seen the same nigga with the 9 die with his eyes open" -Scarface |
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06-30-2010, 03:31 AM
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| vital sines  Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: NSW
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*clears throat Quote:
he rolls for days keepin' under speed limits, Soakin' rains... he still sleeps in the back, with leaks in it/// A dusty dash with heat in it... and he ain't scared to pop a round, stoppin' through towns, he grabs the basics then he's off in a cloud/// Until one waking dawn... whilst the sun was faintly vivid, he saw a sign: "WATERSIDE: why not pay us a visit"/// He contemplates for a minute... hip-flask... scannin' the scene, but he was bored, and just finished his last can of beans/// So he turns... tellin' himself he still gotta plot it safe, even though, there's probably only one cop IN this place/// I mean... he don't want the whole damn S.W.A.T on his case, a bunch-a bodies laying dead with red dots to his face/// He took the... rocks in his safe, put the pump down the side, put the... glock in his waist, then he jumped out the ride/// 'Nice town' he thought... ...takin' food supplies from the shelve, maybe a place where he could start a new life for himself??/// Because the life he was dealt... it wasn't ALL that sick... he coulda had a wife and KIDS, fucken' ALL that shit!!/// A nice place by the lake, where he could... lounge on the porch... but he was interrupted... ...admist resounding thoughts/// He spun around, there was a cop with a piece in his hand, holdin' a picture, asking peeps: 'have you seen this man??'/// Last edited by Elevated Design; 06-30-2010 at 04:58 AM. | ||
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06-30-2010, 04:14 AM
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| vital sines Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: NSW
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i say, make this idea a topical... extented verses, then say pjk 4th Last edited by Elevated Design; 06-30-2010 at 04:35 AM. |
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08-09-2010, 03:30 AM
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dope shit ED.. i didnt even realise you dropped this.. seems like you thrive off this type of shit.. i havent read a lot from u but this is easily some of your nicest work ive seen.. & yea we need 2 extend the verses & let PJK to go head & finish this off.. it'll be a dope lil collab
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08-20-2010, 03:40 AM
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he travels in da shadows, swift as birds in da wind ....... at such a young age, so enfilled with rage picks up the daily news his picture on the front page. wanted: "a man in black" but nothing like will smith "murdered his mum his dad his wife and kids" broke as a motherfucka and now u know why not because he's pennyless cause his soul has died. hes on the run now duckin' dodgin' the law. but he stops for a second thinkin what the fuck for? lost everything he had and its his own fault spiralled out of control now facing life in a vault when he closes his eyes he pictures what he had done the man that he was and the monster hes become. living in solitude gun always by his side he cant even close his eyes, so hes sleeping open eyed on the brink of insomnia and hes going insane mugging people in the street to buy crack cocaine. he cant think straight hes senseless needs to escape the pain is relentless he looks in the mirror, cant look himself in the eye holds the gun to his head as he prepares to die. at that moment officers bust down his door lets off a shot he should of checked it before click click its empty theres no bullets in the gun drops kneed to the floor starts praying hes done. constructive critiscism appreciated dont tell me i suck, tell me something i dont know Last edited by gee-aye-dee; 08-20-2010 at 03:41 AM. Reason: missed a word |
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12-17-2010, 07:15 AM
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| meezyy jayy  Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: dirty south alabama baby
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currupt as a young buck, from da guns and drugs hung wit thugs. sniffing coke.. said he loved da buzz pop's was rarely there.. mom's, she barely cared had his fair share of trouble and struggled wit wear and tear everywhere he glared he saw the down side of things pounds, powder, painkillers, people poppin spider veins grippin' a dirty syringe, i heard he murdered his friend da case was neva solved. but da streets verdict is him he travels in da shadows, swift as birds in da wind moving from place to place, rejecting all face to face, found a place stays indoors all day, he don't even talk because there is nothing to say there is no one to freak, masturbates to the girls that walk the streets dingy sheets, reeks of mildew, like kill moves(the homeless guy from everybody hate's chris) confined voluntarily, asking rats if they will marry him not enough food, so he transforms into very slim doorbell rang, the note of eviction came had to walk the alleys, eating from the trash can surviving on this bad plan, shot up the wrong stuff, hallucinates, he's bat man. climbs the building atop. walks to the edge and drops falls and hits the ground with out a sound.
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12-09-2011, 11:37 AM
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he travels in the shadows, swift as birds in da wind His thoughts rescind only over precautionary things Mistakin' him as a child, and now they're makin' 'im wild The courts've taken his style, and it has made him mild Though his chest still breathes, in his head's his greed His not guilty plea's been festering in him since the seed |
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12-09-2011, 11:41 AM
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12-13-2011, 03:17 PM
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| Junior Member  Join Date: Oct 2011 Location: Crooklyn USA
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Corrupt as a young buck, from da guns and drugs Hung wit thugs. sniffing coke.. he said he loved da buzz Pop's was rarely there.. mom's, she barely cared Had his fair share of trouble and struggled wit wear and tear Everywhere he glared he saw the down side of things Pounds, powder, painkillers, popped spider veins Dude gripped a dirty syringe, i heard he murdered his friend The case was neva solved. but da streets verdict is him He travels in da shadows, swift as birds in da wind Grins as the precipitation falls on his skin This guy just lived a life that was peppered with deception One hand on his bible while the others on the weapon One day I say I know fa sho he'll grow into a man But now the youngest buckeroo just doin all he can Laughin, shootin, high all day smokin drugs in hideaways It inspired me to rhyme today , and no it's not okay The days went on they played his songs on 45's and tapes Oh did I mention this was back in nineteen eighty eight The coke was flowin harder than it ever had before The lines were drawn his mind was gone just fiendin for the raw Since he had the floss all the girlies paid attention And sexed em up on regular without use of protection Now he hit the big time with the chains and platinum plaques Then rappers started dissin and unloading on a track For now lets say that suddenly more dollars in the game Led to jealousy and strain till some gangsters took aim Stars dying in cars fightin to breathe as they bleed on the floors There wasn't reason for war except that's what they lookin for Thats life..... faster than a rocket to space and then he died ... killed by that murderer AIDS |
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