MzAmbition

My thoughts must be twisted inside
Brain cluttered with revenge one the mind
Defending myself always committing a lie
This all began when I was born ready to die
Born
Ready
To
Die
Bending a bible in the darkness I tried
Cant shed a tear my hearts filled on empty
Drowning in my own pool of eternal misery
Im going to be another statistic for American history
Born
Ready
To
Die
As I grow it seems the hurt just expands
I guess you could say I?m possessed or damned
Misery is my perfect match I ordered it on demand
My future is most likely going to finish at a dead end
Born
Ready
To
Die

[Invisible to those with higher intellect
Society is fucked up just like my mind I bet
Don?t act like you haven?t been part of the struggle
When you could be a statistic added to the number]

REPLY W/ suggestions PLEASE ...should i leave out the last stanza

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Simple.

Urban Eskimo

This was a decent lil piece, and as for the last stanza...I'd suggest you should either add more to it or take it out all together.

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Real Eyes Realize Real Lies

MzAmbition

thanks for the feedback ive been playing around with this piece for a minute.

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Simple.

MeSsIaH

good shit.. my kinda piece.. substance>style anyday keep droppin

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Champion hoodie on... prolly lookin bummy wit it
had it on a month straight... i been gettin money wit it

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