langston leguizamO

A Summer's Dream

Had a dream I died
laughing as I laid
lips on Summer's sky
The Sun kissed
Caribbean gold all over
my skin. Melted
my eyes into ocean
blue windows to the soul
of a Pagan deity. Her
gaze withered the ice
in my capillaries
My Puerto Rican rum
flowed freely

Trees whispered incense
into my eardrums. Heard
orchards humming Hip-Hop
from the beaches within
my hometown. Saw
Corona bottles crying
tears of joyful sand
from glass cadavers
My pores leaked
the sweetest tasting ale
I smiled
as it floated in a dew
Next thing I knew

I awoke

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"The pain is invisible, but you can't hide the scars."

J.Q.C.

Hmm an interesting piece. I read this and I read a jam session on a lost love, or perhaps an idea of worldliness. It is interesting in vocabulary, and structure. Obviously an attempt to do a different thing than the average. The only one issue I have here is a basic-ness of topic. True nothing is really new, however the use of imagery could have been more effective. Decent use of metaphor is here. Well done.