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ladreamor · 03-21-2011, 03:07 PM

~you been doin me dirty kid
actin like i ain't hip to ya bullshit
actin like you got the only dick
talkin big game but you ain't slick
cuz
on the real though
your techniques are simple
and I see through them easily
between the lines speaks
all your disrespectful tendencies
your head trip melodies
damn
i thought you had a plan
thought you was the man
but you front on command
i was sinkin in ya lies like quicksand
talkin bout rubbabands and holdin me down
what you meant was pullin me down
spueing out sounds
that represent what the ideal looks like
reality?
not quite
but luckily
i learned how to do me
waitn on you so intently
then finally
it all made sense
i was chasing a fallocy
tryin to pay emotional rent with i.o.us
ignoring the clues
but i'ma go on ahead and move along
so you can keep on....doin you~1

Syd · 03-21-2011, 09:53 PM

way too simple on all levels but decent try

ladreamor · 03-22-2011, 07:48 AM

~thanks for the feed~1

atheist killer · 03-25-2011, 08:58 AM

This was aight but it kind of lack flow a lil.You could of tighten up the flow a lil but over all this was aight not bad.Maybe if you could do this to a beat if might work.You might could get away with this.

03-21-2011, 03:07 PM	#1
ladreamor ~on that real trip~1 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: ~burquestyle~ Posts: 28	~the end~ ~you been doin me dirty kid actin like i ain't hip to ya bullshit actin like you got the only dick talkin big game but you ain't slick cuz on the real though your techniques are simple and I see through them easily between the lines speaks all your disrespectful tendencies your head trip melodies damn i thought you had a plan thought you was the man but you front on command i was sinkin in ya lies like quicksand talkin bout rubbabands and holdin me down what you meant was pullin me down spueing out sounds that represent what the ideal looks like reality? not quite but luckily i learned how to do me waitn on you so intently then finally it all made sense i was chasing a fallocy tryin to pay emotional rent with i.o.us ignoring the clues but i'ma go on ahead and move along so you can keep on....doin you~1

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03-21-2011, 09:53 PM	#2
Syd Pro Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 370	way too simple on all levels but decent try

03-22-2011, 07:48 AM	#3
ladreamor ~on that real trip~1 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: ~burquestyle~ Posts: 28	~thanks for the feed~1

03-25-2011, 08:58 AM	#4
atheist killer Danger in the house Join Date: Oct 2010 Location: washington dc Posts: 117	This was aight but it kind of lack flow a lil.You could of tighten up the flow a lil but over all this was aight not bad.Maybe if you could do this to a beat if might work.You might could get away with this.