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ladreamor · 03-22-2011, 07:56 AM

~I am ventin
Spitting out the thoughts that relent and
Takin it out on my pen and
Tryin ta shake off this feelin of irritation
Anger's illumination
Headlining confrontations
Like "que miras hue'?"
You want shit? - don?t bring my way
Cuz I got issues kid
Don't misjudge my lighthearted grin
Thinkin' she's soft -
Yea, I'm soft pero not at any cost
I won't start shit but I'll finish it off
Explode off the top
Cuz
It takes nothing to push a button
Talkin shit - steady frontin
Always tryin ta play me
Like I'm slow or
Don't know
Yea, I have my burnt moments
Pero my mind es on the grow
A massive steady flow
Thank God for intellect to balance the emotional
Before nerves get blown
And thoughts become irrational
More than personal - international
Where changes need to come
While widespread
It starts with one
And then another
I?m a child of God
A single mother
A lyricist reaching out
To sisters, brothers, best friends, lovers
I?m an addict on the recover
Don't judge me
Embrace the passion in me
No provocation necessary
I'm chill to kick it naturally
I like peace
And
Smoking treez
And
Jokes to slap knees
Like
Politicians hate greed
Like
I drive the suggested speed
Naw
But it's the ambition in me see
Makin me drive like I got somewhere to be
I like verses that set minds free
I like beats and harmonies
Music helps me breathe
Helps me see what I couldn't before see
Memories, old tendencies
I bare plenty of scars for the world to see
But even they won't stop me
These trials we go through
Are miles we grow through
Grinding like teeth do
Detaining like dna proof
Some escape - others pursue
Seeking to defeat
Bounce right back, when knocked off feet
Challenges come to greet
Intent to disagree
proposing failure and insecurities
Planting doubts to breed
disappointment for the masses intended to succeed
But what so many fail to see
Is
We shape and mold our own destinies
Learn to think freely
Relax and let peace be
The ideal identity
Remembering integrity and decency
Those fond memories
Demoted to lesser positions
We suffer from spiritual malnutrition
Lacking in care and comprehension
Take those wack practices and bench em
Cuz they won't keep you in the game
They won't boost your claim
That you are all that and more
You and I are one in the same
Or so to speak
Come down off your pedestal and exist humbly
Who are you really?
but another who breathes
Lost or found
Hero or freak
Don't waste your time on self-righteous beliefs
Or egocentric tendencies
Beware of the company you keep
cuz the saying holds tru
That when you lie down with dawgs
You get up wit fleas
Don't claim to be locked out
When you been handed the keys
Knowledge lies before you
Have a seat and feast
Don't be defined monetarily
Cuz you can't take it with you when you leave
See
Life begins north of monetary
Seven trumps a blaring
Don't be deceived
Don't know what humble means
Til you been brought to your knees
Unable to breathe
Begging for relief
But when relief comes
The gratitude fades
Cranial swelling ensues
Which awakens the craze
Props set ablaze
Allow me to persuade
Let balance save the day
Like
Dunnanantada
p-p-p-personal power!!!
I'ma be aight through the sunshine and the showers
They rep theirs
We rep ours
d-d-d-did I stutter?
U can't hear me I'll speak a lil louder
Be warned though
The truth can be sour
On the way to freedom
Take your truths
Clean and deseed em
Cuz there?s no fakin ya funk kid
You knew you were foul just like eybody else did
But the difference is you couldn?t face it
Couldn't replace sick
Wit
Realistic lips
Words
Those things we use
To
Represent our whos and our dos
Our laughter and blues
Intention clues from those who undastand word value
Things for the mind to chew
And digest
Keep what's acceptable - throw out the rest
Setting thoughts and emotions free
Lifting weight off the chest
Or whateva ya'll
I'm just ventin~1

Syd · 03-24-2011, 10:33 PM

Way too long, well the structure wasnt too good in other words. From the little i read the flow was not too good either sounded like something right off the top, correct if i'm wrong, and u need better vocab to make it more interesting.

ladreamor · 03-25-2011, 08:24 PM

~thanks for the feed~1

03-22-2011, 07:56 AM	#1
ladreamor ~on that real trip~1 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: ~burquestyle~ Posts: 28	~just a thought~ ~I am ventin Spitting out the thoughts that relent and Takin it out on my pen and Tryin ta shake off this feelin of irritation Anger's illumination Headlining confrontations Like "que miras hue'?" You want shit? - don?t bring my way Cuz I got issues kid Don't misjudge my lighthearted grin Thinkin' she's soft - Yea, I'm soft pero not at any cost I won't start shit but I'll finish it off Explode off the top Cuz It takes nothing to push a button Talkin shit - steady frontin Always tryin ta play me Like I'm slow or Don't know Yea, I have my burnt moments Pero my mind es on the grow A massive steady flow Thank God for intellect to balance the emotional Before nerves get blown And thoughts become irrational More than personal - international Where changes need to come While widespread It starts with one And then another I?m a child of God A single mother A lyricist reaching out To sisters, brothers, best friends, lovers I?m an addict on the recover Don't judge me Embrace the passion in me No provocation necessary I'm chill to kick it naturally I like peace And Smoking treez And Jokes to slap knees Like Politicians hate greed Like I drive the suggested speed Naw But it's the ambition in me see Makin me drive like I got somewhere to be I like verses that set minds free I like beats and harmonies Music helps me breathe Helps me see what I couldn't before see Memories, old tendencies I bare plenty of scars for the world to see But even they won't stop me These trials we go through Are miles we grow through Grinding like teeth do Detaining like dna proof Some escape - others pursue Seeking to defeat Bounce right back, when knocked off feet Challenges come to greet Intent to disagree proposing failure and insecurities Planting doubts to breed disappointment for the masses intended to succeed But what so many fail to see Is We shape and mold our own destinies Learn to think freely Relax and let peace be The ideal identity Remembering integrity and decency Those fond memories Demoted to lesser positions We suffer from spiritual malnutrition Lacking in care and comprehension Take those wack practices and bench em Cuz they won't keep you in the game They won't boost your claim That you are all that and more You and I are one in the same Or so to speak Come down off your pedestal and exist humbly Who are you really? but another who breathes Lost or found Hero or freak Don't waste your time on self-righteous beliefs Or egocentric tendencies Beware of the company you keep cuz the saying holds tru That when you lie down with dawgs You get up wit fleas Don't claim to be locked out When you been handed the keys Knowledge lies before you Have a seat and feast Don't be defined monetarily Cuz you can't take it with you when you leave See Life begins north of monetary Seven trumps a blaring Don't be deceived Don't know what humble means Til you been brought to your knees Unable to breathe Begging for relief But when relief comes The gratitude fades Cranial swelling ensues Which awakens the craze Props set ablaze Allow me to persuade Let balance save the day Like Dunnanantada p-p-p-personal power!!! I'ma be aight through the sunshine and the showers They rep theirs We rep ours d-d-d-did I stutter? U can't hear me I'll speak a lil louder Be warned though The truth can be sour On the way to freedom Take your truths Clean and deseed em Cuz there?s no fakin ya funk kid You knew you were foul just like eybody else did But the difference is you couldn?t face it Couldn't replace sick Wit Realistic lips Words Those things we use To Represent our whos and our dos Our laughter and blues Intention clues from those who undastand word value Things for the mind to chew And digest Keep what's acceptable - throw out the rest Setting thoughts and emotions free Lifting weight off the chest Or whateva ya'll I'm just ventin~1 Last edited by ladreamor; 03-22-2011 at 08:01 AM. Reason: ~question mark removal~

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03-24-2011, 10:33 PM	#2
Syd Pro Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 370	Way too long, well the structure wasnt too good in other words. From the little i read the flow was not too good either sounded like something right off the top, correct if i'm wrong, and u need better vocab to make it more interesting.

03-25-2011, 08:24 PM	#3
ladreamor ~on that real trip~1 Join Date: Sep 2010 Location: ~burquestyle~ Posts: 28	~thanks for the feed~1