Personal Demon 1st Verse

[AKSent]

(Same thing, looking for criticism)

INSTA-BEAT (Click Me)
http://www.soundclick.com/player/sin...&q=hi&newref=1

I had the world in my palms dropped the girl from my arms 0:22
she once cried out out turn but I, let her move on
I'm no longer concerned cuz, concern isn't strong
now I watch as she burns, burns down till she's gone
nothing really changes but my perception of change
and I could turn the pages but the words stay the same
call me a derelict piece of shit unaware of bliss
who experienced happiness once but then I woke from it
I'm being facetious at times misogynistic
my demon reaches farther then my hardship elicits
inner me is lethargic and speechless
my heart is in pieces I'm guarded beneath it
you've already seen it my carcass is eaten'
every dead feeling that you ever had
is caught in my teeth in between them
their soft and unsweetened, thoughtless and beaten
and in the middle of the feast is my personal demons
Yuh.

[Syd]

this was sick loved the beat might drop to it later on. good job

[AKSent]

Thanks man, I'll probably be droppin on here more often.
Yeah Anno Domini has alot of great/gritty beats.
Late.