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Anamosity · 05-19-2011, 06:17 PM

the plot thickens, im feeling a subtle notion within...
this heart that beats to a different beat when you listen
but do you in a way, that your gettin what i say?...
or do my words get lost in the vibes that you convey
cause just when i figure that i got you figured out
you gesture in a way that has me leaning on my doubts
you call from a distance, im resistant.... but alone
so i feel the need to believe its better to leave my comfort zone
i stray from what i know into thee unknown
your eyes open up and say... please just come home
but i been in this house thats riddled with stones
skeletons fall out of the closets as we fiddle with bones
i cant see myself talking daily to these walls
that keep asking me where your at and why you never called
im going crazy in this place, its time to let it burn
i suffered long enough and im thinking its your turn

Syd · 05-23-2011, 03:22 PM

the flow didnt work for me, and some of the lines didnt rhyme too well otherwise it was a decent drop. where the hell everyone else at?

Flick · 09-03-2011, 09:10 AM

This was decent the last line worked out good but you had a statement in the third line but put a question mark at the end so you could follow up on the next verse didnt really work, but past that you picked up the pace with a few flaws here and there but decent drop man

JayBaltimore · 10-06-2011, 03:02 AM

good read... i'm prolly more intrigued in this verse because i can really relate to this at the moment.

long time no see...happy to see you still writing. god knows i haven't written shit in a couple of years.

05-19-2011, 06:17 PM	#1
Anamosity bloody tears Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: this cold world Posts: 553	"all in my head" the plot thickens, im feeling a subtle notion within... this heart that beats to a different beat when you listen but do you in a way, that your gettin what i say?... or do my words get lost in the vibes that you convey cause just when i figure that i got you figured out you gesture in a way that has me leaning on my doubts you call from a distance, im resistant.... but alone so i feel the need to believe its better to leave my comfort zone i stray from what i know into thee unknown your eyes open up and say... please just come home but i been in this house thats riddled with stones skeletons fall out of the closets as we fiddle with bones i cant see myself talking daily to these walls that keep asking me where your at and why you never called im going crazy in this place, its time to let it burn i suffered long enough and im thinking its your turn __________________ *Scripted Science* im walkin this tight rope with a slight hope i'll make it across my soul burning hotter as the devil takes his flames to the cross

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05-23-2011, 03:22 PM	#2
Syd Pro Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 370	the flow didnt work for me, and some of the lines didnt rhyme too well otherwise it was a decent drop. where the hell everyone else at?

09-03-2011, 09:10 AM	#3
Flick Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Location: Fort Myers, FL Posts: 313	This was decent the last line worked out good but you had a statement in the third line but put a question mark at the end so you could follow up on the next verse didnt really work, but past that you picked up the pace with a few flaws here and there but decent drop man