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08-29-2011, 06:30 PM
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| Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2011 Location: Fort Myers, FL
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|  Something about a movie or a dog or something
My life could be a movie But it would have to be a drama I have been kicked and spit on By this world, like a llama Got my rain coat on But i'm still getting wet My minds about to blow Like a mother fucking jet My tolerance for shit Is at an all time low Try and test me bitch If you dont think so I'm gonna rise from the ground Like the walking dead And turn this world of ours On it's God damm head Bring the stupid shit on world I'm ready to dance I'm done walking through life Like i'm in a damm trance Fuck your rules and fuck your obligations From now on i'm living life with no limitations My lifes a cave in But i'm coming out the dark Your about to see how loud This fucking dog can bark And every single night I,m going to howl at the moon Who let the dog's out Your about to see soon |
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08-30-2011, 02:28 PM
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| formerly known as DA BIGGEST  Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: Igloo Projects
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| Decent drop here doggy, it doesn't have as much substance as some of your other verses but what I noticed was this one has a handful of concepts thrown in there...so it shows that you're testin those creative juices. So like I said the content lacked but the creativity was up a notch, soon you'll have to combine the 2 and see what you can produce.. KOS
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08-30-2011, 05:18 PM
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true i struggle on topical verses, i feel pretty confident in creativity just how the hell to put it all together so i can move from topic to topic without forcing it like my outspoken thread felt really creative but couldnt put it together came out as a buch of shit talking lines
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08-30-2011, 05:23 PM
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| formerly known as DA BIGGEST Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: Igloo Projects
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| Like I said, it'll all come in time. When you get a chance would you mind leavin some feedback for others, voting on battles and reading other peoples work can play a big part in gettin better...it definitely helped me a bunch anyways. So if ya could just leave some words for others every now and then to help keep things circulating around here. KOS
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08-30-2011, 07:41 PM
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Yeah i can do that
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08-31-2011, 04:05 PM
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| It'll also help you get more feedback on your stuff too, people will generally return the favour if you leave a link at the end of your post.
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09-15-2011, 03:36 PM
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yes yes yall
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